haha thank you, kindly Marcia! I've got to say it's a grind working with the ones I've got left, but wackamoling your own braincells is good character development.
Confusing a box of James Bond DVD's for a box of Red Bull. Hilarious! After viewing the illustrations, I can see how it might happen. They are both cubes, after all. On to part 2.
Some glues are brain cell killing compounds enough to slip you into the limbo of humanity and near as crazed manic zombie. I am referring to contact cement which I have witnessed some of the people where I lived used and boy were they all sorts of loony.
That is a fine idea! My mate said the same thing actually, he's been trying to hassle/encourage me. I'm a bit scared in truth. I just think I can't do it. But it's probably just like in my life I've assumed i can't do, but have, then, done
Of course! You can't do it until you do it. What do you have to lose, anyway? The worst that can happen is that you learn something about the process. Just go for it!
Thank you Joan! you're bloody right. I'll hit you with my tier 2 excuse, I don't have time to write an article a week and a novel. I barely have time as it is. I'll hide behind that excuse and die with regret, thank YOU very much!
More of a glue man myself! Im a sucker for the classics. I guess that’s cough medicine? I did just the once, nearly got my friends stabbed for hurling my shorts at a drug dealers car, while sprinting
Sure. The prose is sound but the narative doesn't flow. Comedic beats especially dialogue need to follow a tempo. Try counting sylables to see if they need trimming or extending. For examples of humorous beats in naratives read Lemon Snickets A Series of Unfortunate Events, or Terry Patchets Discworld series. Great examples for efficient dialogue in comedic situations.
Now I have cravings for monster munch.
Haha better then the alternative!
Well, Mr, you clearly still have enough brain cells to be able to write this piece of hilarity.
Gold!
You should be writing comedy skits for stand-up. Fucking hilarious!
haha thank you, kindly Marcia! I've got to say it's a grind working with the ones I've got left, but wackamoling your own braincells is good character development.
I did write a sitcom pilot, you might like! Several people really like it https://youtu.be/Br-xj2IRf2I
Confusing a box of James Bond DVD's for a box of Red Bull. Hilarious! After viewing the illustrations, I can see how it might happen. They are both cubes, after all. On to part 2.
An honest mistake! Thanks K.C. I feel like the trilogy declines slightly, but in that comforting way trilogies should
What a trip!
Some glues are brain cell killing compounds enough to slip you into the limbo of humanity and near as crazed manic zombie. I am referring to contact cement which I have witnessed some of the people where I lived used and boy were they all sorts of loony.
Interesting story 😆
haha what a trip, indeed! Wow, where was that, if you don't mind me asking?
Just one of the islands in the Pacific
I want to see Faris and his profound nonsense in action, and more of the meta-narrative commentary. Will read the follow-up!
haha thanks Joan! He was a man of wonder. He fell asleep on a radiator once
Epic! Perhaps you should write a novel with him as a main character.
That is a fine idea! My mate said the same thing actually, he's been trying to hassle/encourage me. I'm a bit scared in truth. I just think I can't do it. But it's probably just like in my life I've assumed i can't do, but have, then, done
Of course! You can't do it until you do it. What do you have to lose, anyway? The worst that can happen is that you learn something about the process. Just go for it!
Thank you Joan! you're bloody right. I'll hit you with my tier 2 excuse, I don't have time to write an article a week and a novel. I barely have time as it is. I'll hide behind that excuse and die with regret, thank YOU very much!
O man I remember friends who used to huff stuff................ The good ole days!
Haha they were, weren’t they? Back when huffing was huffing!
Y’all ever huff duster? or chug Nyquil?
More of a glue man myself! Im a sucker for the classics. I guess that’s cough medicine? I did just the once, nearly got my friends stabbed for hurling my shorts at a drug dealers car, while sprinting
Narrative asside it was a finely written comedy.
Thanks Charles! And thanks for the feedback, would you mind giving me a few notes on how the narrative could be improved?
Sure. The prose is sound but the narative doesn't flow. Comedic beats especially dialogue need to follow a tempo. Try counting sylables to see if they need trimming or extending. For examples of humorous beats in naratives read Lemon Snickets A Series of Unfortunate Events, or Terry Patchets Discworld series. Great examples for efficient dialogue in comedic situations.
Thanks for the feedback! That’s helpful. I know what you mean something in the flow wasn’t quite sitting right with me, at points.
Sorry to be cheeky, could you give me your opinion on this? To tell me if this flows better https://wrongchannel.substack.com/p/times-i-shat-my-pants-8?utm_source=publication-search
I am sorry, but the subject matter is too off putting for my taste. I hope you understand.
That's completely fair enough Charles. I forget other people aren't as at ease with popping themselves as me
Its not just that, but the picture and some word choice made it seem like a fetish story.
I feel dizzy from reading this... and there's a Part 2?!
Good dizzy or bad dizzy? And part 3 later today!
Good dizzy!
in that case, I am dizzy with gratitude!
Monster Munch and Furniture polish? Really?
What next... Meths and Curly-Wurly?
Haha skag and a chomp?